Song Lyrics, MkI.

Well, I've cut and changed the words around a lot, but how does this sound for some song lyrics?

You can read "Faithless", the original poem, here. Questions and comments welcome, and actively encouraged. If you think it's shit, tell me why. If you think it's the shit, tell me why :-)
I don't have a melody yet. Feel free to write me one, if you like.

( Read the lyricified version )